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Author Topic: League Back Story - Chapter One - Part 1  (Read 7450 times)

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League Back Story - Chapter One - Part 1
« on: April 20, 2011, 01:38:23 AM EDT »

Greetings All!

Ok, posted below are just the first few pages from our League backstory.  JaxonRone is putting the finishing touches on it, but I wanted to give you all a little glimpse of it so you have an idea of where things are heading.  I can't wait to show you the final version!

In this snippet, we introduce my character (Tormax Drayson) as well as Thumpernickle's (Perth Colton) and JaxonRone's (Jaxon Rone) and describe a bit about how it is we came to find ourselves in the company of each other.


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It is a dark time for the Republic.

It has been a tumultuous time since the end of The Great Galactic War and the signing of the dubious Treaty of Coruscant, a time of fragile peace, shadowed maneuverings, and the ubiquitous threat of Sith pervasions.  The scars left by three decades of war still riddle the Core Worlds and Outer Rim territories.  The Galactic Senate is unable to protect the interests of its populace, and as a Cold War quietly takes form the innocent suffer within its shadowy wake.

With thousands of Jedi lost during the war and six of its Master
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #1 on: April 20, 2011, 02:52:13 AM EDT »

I'm going to assume that Typhon is actually supposed to be Tython?  http://www.swtor.com/info/holonet/planets/tython

Is it possible as well for the orange coloured section to have spaces between the paragraphs?  I find it difficult to read O_O.

Other than that it sounds really good and I can't wait for the rest of it!
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #2 on: April 20, 2011, 03:39:59 AM EDT »

Yeap...sorry...as I said, still a rough draft.  Bound to be a few typos :D
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #3 on: April 20, 2011, 05:16:55 AM EDT »

 B-)
Me like, can't wait for the rest and the game to play with all of you
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #4 on: April 20, 2011, 07:36:50 AM EDT »

like it....keep up the good work sir...
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #5 on: April 20, 2011, 08:12:34 AM EDT »

Can't wait to see the rest :)!
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #6 on: April 20, 2011, 11:14:56 AM EDT »

Very much look forward to hearing the rest of the background of the guild  :-)
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #7 on: April 20, 2011, 11:32:12 AM EDT »

Very very good. I like it alot. But I have one question. In the story, are you standing on an observatory platform in the Jedi Temple on Corruscant? If so I don't know if you have read Deception but it deals with the sacking, the whole temple was leveled, not a building standing. Sorry if i read your the backstory wrong or anything.
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #8 on: April 20, 2011, 12:20:04 PM EDT »

I have not yet read Deceived. I don't think JaxonRone has read it yet either. So thanks for catching that. I think it will be a simple change from observation deck to Temple ruins. If there are any other continuity issues I am interested in hearing them.
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #9 on: April 20, 2011, 12:28:56 PM EDT »

Well, there is also the issue of how much time has elapsed since the treaty and the start of our story.  It's possible that some sort of clean up effort has at least started to take place.
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« Reply #10 on: April 20, 2011, 02:09:02 PM EDT »

yeah im of the opinion the game is a few years after the treaty. tho many sectors deemed not important to governance and economic stability on corruscant are left untouched is what the profile says on the site and the republic has turned a little on the jedi so then we have the issue of whether the temple was deemed important or not before the jedi removed to tython.
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #11 on: April 20, 2011, 04:32:56 PM EDT »

yeah im of the opinion the game is a few years after the treaty.

I seem to remember reading somewhere that TOR occurs about 10 years after the Treaty of Coruscant.  Though I can't find the specific Dev comment that states this (since it doesn't let me search specifically for Dev comments), on Wookipedia, it does say that Treaty was signed in 3653 BBY and that the timeline for TOR is 3643 to 3641 BBY
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« Reply #12 on: April 20, 2011, 04:37:45 PM EDT »

Actually after refining my search via username I was able to find the reference.

http://www.swtor.com/community/showthread.php?t=258519&highlight=ten+years

Quote from: DanielErickson;5363777
Hey folks,

We've always kept the end of the timeline a little vague since some origin stories start a little earlier than others, have more time pass during their stories, etc.

The window for the game start is about 10-12 years after the treaty of Coruscant. Most player characters weren't old enough to be adults during the last war but many of the people you'll interact with were. This is the next generation, watching the Treaty of Coruscant tear at the edges and wondering how long until the seemingly inevitable war to end it all begins.

Hope that helps!

Daniel:csw_tattooine:
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« Reply #13 on: April 20, 2011, 05:04:17 PM EDT »

Crap now i'm gonna have to go to my character bio and see if the years i gave fit into the timeline. I was figuring TOR to be like 2-5 years after. But that still fits in a bit. If you go to the TOR site and read the article on Corruscant it says that most of the places still haven't been touched since the Sith sacking. So that still kinda fits in whether the Temple has been renovated at all. I don't think it has tho since the Jedi pulled out and went to Tython almost right after.
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Re: League Back Story Teaser
« Reply #14 on: April 21, 2011, 12:44:40 PM EDT »

Few gramatical things, but otherwise everything I caught was addressed.  Well done.

And now I too have to go check my character bio.
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